January 28, 2005
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Something simple for now, to rest from the compexties of the Three_Headed_Sarahs site.
Stretched-out haiku
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the lollipop-lady
waits for
her first child
and the first
drop of rain
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a haiku
is a poem
that understands
the
silence
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where the
snowman
was
a carrot…
a hat…
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picnic
in the
car
it is still
raining
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last night
i missed you
o moon
how i cursed
the clouds
and the rain
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a pretty
girl’s
smile…
i can forgive
the rain
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after cleaning
out the pigs
baby’s dirty
nappy*
smells fine
(*=US diaper)
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blackbird pecking
the peanut-butter
off of
the toast
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a chicken
came into
the farm-house
i hid
my
boiled egg
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the sea
melts
the footsteps
you made
in yesterday’s
sand
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haiku by
“Dandelion Leaves”
a Terry Cuthbert
personæ
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I have unsubscribed to dailyhaiku. I find the so called haiku there utter crap. America is the only country in the world where haiku is any old rubbish stuck into a 5-7-5 format.
It’s not for me, you lot can have your fun and the site is fun, is a worthy site, and a good site. But to call it haiku is as absurd as calling a limerick a sonnet.
Terry.
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Sorry, the time I had to visit all the commenters of the previous blog is over. Xanga was down when I had the chance to be here!!!
I’ll be back though.
Red Poppy Queen of Hearts, some blogs come up as a HTTP 500 error!
Comments (56)
I really enjoyed these. Easy to understand. Wish I could write so simply. Is Dandelion Leaves new? Don’t remember seeing that name before.
Your haiku is absolutely beautiful. It sent me to a happy place.
Burst forth from scales of Pineapples
Comes the Beauty
Of the Poet~
Shimmering
hmmm
your talents never fail to amaze me
I *smile*
Thanks for the simple Haikus. Specially the word rain I can hear all day.
Wow. I love it.
I read it out loud. Sounds rhythmic and good. 
These are so beautiful! I don’t remember this personae either, but I am fairly new here. I guess the Sarah’s site beckons, but sometimes I am afraid to step into their territory. Here goes…
“Dandelion Leaves” has it’s own site but I am not much of a haiku writer. http://ffpoets.homestead.com/Leaves.html
great short stuff. I never have the patience for “format” but I love them.
Word pictures again…and so wonderful
Great haiku-stays on my mind, love delving with it, trying to write.
(((hugs!)))
D
Simple, fun, and insightful.
wow i love those. absolutely nice.
I am impressed. I have no knowledge of haiku, but I plan to find some info on it. I think it answers my reluctance to write poetry for I find myself being wordy and trying to impress the reader with my vocabulary then feeling ashamed. I think with haiku forcing a self-editing of words might be good for me to practice, what do you think?
BTW I really liked these.
Like nature herself
We conform to a format
As we live and breathe
You write what you will
And we read as we desire
Haiku merely is
(not my cuppa)
Hot damn – I liked these! Been a while since I’ve tried a haiku or two….
Well Terry you are not writing Haikus but bits and pieces ,I don’t go to the site you mention never have .but if I write a Haiku I prefert to stick to the original 5-7-5 /I hate Haibun, I think it is stupid and a lot of Australian so called know it alls have a site and it pains me to read it.So I don’t I can’t wasste my precious time on here.
Rainy
daytime
bleak.
thats what I call a true Haiku, I know it is daft but as it only has to have 3 lines .I couldn’t be bothered to continue the 5.7.5 in each one. You say you would like to write poetry at my age, a lot of people would be glad to be alive at my age.I sometimes think I have lived long enough, still when its my time ,I will go I won’t hasten it. Cheers Marj
i just like to write….hee hee….hope all is well in Clowne….
I too would have hid my boiled egg from the chicken…huggs..Sassy
I like these haiku ..if only i knew how to do it ..i tried my hand on poetry but i can never do it. here’s my first attempt of haiku
i like to write
i like to draw
when im inspired …
very nice & different from your usual posted here thank u magi
hey. sorry about the soccer/football mix up. i see where you would get lost.
i don’t understand the lollipop lady haiku, but i love the definition of haiku. i write a few when i just want to get the words out of my head. and the one about the snowman melting away, it’s makes me think of frosty and what was left after he melted. picnic in the car was good too. almost as if there should be a ‘because’ somewhere there. who doesn’t miss the moon when it rains? and that transition from the moon haiku to the rain one. nicely done. like they were part of the same poem. the quote makes a lovely haiku. when you’ve had worse, you can deal with the bad. the blackbird haiku seems like it’s written by a casual observer. and yeah, don’t want to upset the chicken. although i feel it has more meaning than just a chicken and an egg. is the last haiku sort of an advice? like, make more tracks or keep making tracks b/c they’re going to disappear. i don’t know, i’m thinking here. but anyway, overall, Dandelion Leaves is a great poet.
WOW
these are stunning and amazing —
so much is conveyed so succinctly in each one.
WOW
Listen up every other poet in the world – Lord Pineapple’s done it to perfection – the rest of us can just stop – someone’s finally gotten it all right.
Someone (the above commenter) writes just like the Sarahs’ with a sneer!
i like the loly pop lady..
i know her..
take care ..*hugs*
blessings..Sheri
Dear Terry,
I was about to comment on the disregarding of the 5-7-5 syllabic scheme of Haiku until I read your explanation. I, too, have wondered about the popularity of the “Daily Haiku” site and wanted to create a “Daily Pantoum” site but doubt if I would get many takers.
True Haiku also references the seasons and nature. I often wonder if the syllabic structure works when transcribing English into Japanese.
Michael F. Nyiri, poet, philosopher, fool
Well, I have to say, you do write some gorgeous poetry. -Sigh-
It’s mesmerizing.
there is nothing wrong with 5-7-5 format, but i do agree that the confinment to 5-7-5 is rediculous. for that matter, confining a poem in any matter seem a bit dumb to me.
sidesh0w
{{{{{{{{{{Terry}}}}}}}}}} Wonderful
melting sand Lord a beautiful visual it seemed oddly quite here thanx magi
I just still trying to figure out why that poor baby had swine in its diaper/nappy.
LordP, I just read your comment at BaldMike’s site about the baby in Bosnia you photographed. You make more sense to me now.
Jim
To say
You must be perfect
Is to say
I don’t
Accept you.
Sorry! I am stuck on the topic of my blog today!
You got some nice stuff there, pineapple. As they say in the comic books, you got chops.
Loved the all but my fav was the snowman haiku. You do seem to find the words.
I am trying to do a little catch up commenting today. I wonder if I can cover 48 seniors and 30 photographers. And then there are about 80 poets. I think I’ll have to work one ring at a time and forget the duplications.
Running circles
Post to Post:
Xanga comments
Just sign me “way behind”,
Well, US or not, Haiku is the only form of poetry I truly enjoy. Most of the poetry I see around xanga is the teenaged “I have a broken heart and want to die ” crapola. Which is one reason I love visting your site. I enjoyed your stretched out Haikus, some were very creative.
haha, awesome =]
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I really like these because they are not the expected haikus…perhaps because I am used to the kind my students write…hurried and thoughless (only occasionally brilliant). Thank you for the link to the teacher poem…I can really identify with that one. Only a teacher…too bad I couldn’t have done something with my life.
…a hat… a carrot…
I like this
Well, I read these on Saturday and then xanga turned out the lights…
I love these. You always write adorable and amazing things.
I enjoy reading them.
I hope you are doing well.
I have horrible onion breath. I never should have eaten those onions at lunch, bleh!!
I have brushed my teeth three times.
I think I will have onion dreams tonight…
Be Well, Lord P
Rosemary
I am not unhappy with you in any way. I respect you. My little Haiku was just a comment on my own blog today because that was what was on my mind. It was not intended to show displeasure with you.
a haiku
is a poem
that understands
the
silence
** all of these Haikus are very enjoyable Terry
Your haikus are beautiful and so perfect. I could never compete.
Your comment on my site brought tears to my eyes. Your compliment is the highlight of my day. Thank you!
a haiku
is a poem
that understands
the
silence
BEAUTIFUL WRITING!
Lordy, my favorite is the picnic in the car haiku. I’m not a member of any haiku group so all I can do is point out the thanks Americans get for just trying to make the world a better place!
I looked for a haiku definition on Google and came up with an informative page:http://www.ahapoetry.com/haidefjr.htm
which makes attempting it seem too complicated for me. Or, to put it another way, no one can haiku like the Japanese.
My favorite was the one about the chicken and the boiled egg.
You’re kind of holier than thou, aren’t you?
I’m not sure if I find you very appealing.
But you should not be concerned as to what I think.
I’m going to eat at a tacky USA diner now.
Now run along.
Courtney “Bombass”
Let’s just say that there are some mysteries left to themselves. And believe me when I say that I wish there were more professing Christians who had your heart and used their talents the way you do. And this is one more mystery best left to itself.
One reason for the cross on the tassle is that I graduated from a Christian university, where I earned my journalism degree.
I’ve looked into heraldry and found the family coat of arms for my ancestors. Three cannon balls, a key, but no crosses that I can remember. I’ll have to look it up again to verify it.
Jim
Boiled to essence,
Devoid of frills
Bravo.
S2
i <333 your haiku’s. theyre fun and simple
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Hi, dear friend!
I have been reading your comments on others sites and you sound so cuddly that I fear you may be placing yourself in danger of predatory women reaching out to whisk you off to never-never land!! Please do not let that happen.
Point me to some sites online that will teach me haiku, please.
Hope you’ll be back..miss you! I love this haiku ….its so …pretty. I like the “ingredients” you have placed into it. Definitely creative as usual.
And you’re right ..who really adheres to the 5-7-5 ruls of haikus these days? Another writer once said to me, “who knows how many syllables there are in these lines once they’re translated into japanese ?” Have a good week ahead anyway.
I don’t even try haikus because I know I can’t do them justice. I love there.
i was worried about my own hiaku that i submitted there… i wasn’t sure it was even a real one cause all i knew was the 575… what else is needed uther than substance?